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Hi! I am here like I promised! This chapter was a good one. It was the part where the boy meets the girl. One of the most important parts. I ...
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Hey there! This story is brilliant! It does get gory during in the middle, but still. The description of the scenery at the start was the best, I could clearly ...
Dec 6, 2010 -
Re: The Cherry Code - Chapter Three - The Unexpected Company
I pulled off in the dead of night , onto the sandy shore where I began to build a fire to keep me warm and ward off curious animals. When ...
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Re: Girl in Blue
Hi there there is one thing that confused me in this she sat down and pulls out what looks like a cell phone you are using two diffrent tenses, past ...
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Re: Foretold (Chapter 6)
Just a few typing errors I walked to the edge of the tree's again there is no ' in trees Sure, it was steep, but it was nothing my lean, ...
Nov 28, 2010 -
Re: The Cherry Code- Prologue
Hi sister, I saw some things that I would change. I could hear only the crunching of the dying leaves beneath my feet and the wind howling in my ears ...
Nov 27, 2010
