FaulknerCannes

First of all, I have to say, I don't relate with the message of this story at all. Then again, I'm not like most people in this community. Avid writers, ...

I have to say, despite making the same errors myself, you've done a lot of 'telling' here instead of showing, and that just doesn't pique my interest. Although you've done ...

First of all, you need to be wary of the paragraphing, as you seem to leave two or even three spacing between each paragraphs instead of one neat little space. ...

Uh, is this a parody? Because it seems like a parody, with its blatant lack of punctuations, paragraphing and grammatically accurate sentences, its spelling errors, and just its overall poor ...

Wow. That was pretty good. The writing flow was smooth with few distractions. You could really feel the tension rising soon as they begin sipping that champagne. From the foreshadowing ...