Fatimah

Thanks for the feedback, I shall work on those points mentioned. First thing first, no more stealing lines from songs, from now on I'll try and keep it original. Secondly, ...

Thanks guys, I really appreciate your comments. I have taken them into consideration and I've tried to work on the points mentioned when I wrote my second poem that I ...

I quite enjoyed this one, but for future references I think you should try and develop your own rhythm so you can engage the audience. Keep it up :)