FashionistState

The preview button made me lose everything I was going to say! ;___; But I'll rewrite what I was trying to say. xDD First of all I just wanted to ...

Wow! I love the plotline...and the ending has already made me want to read more. The setting and emotions previously evoked allowed for a big, but believable shock - I ...

Hi, Drawers. :3 I really like this piece! Your style is concise but tells plenty about the situation. This is just nitpicking, but I suggest you could add more description ...

I don't really read many stories about internet relationships, let alone dangerous ones, that don't end up becoming giant clichés, but I think you could pull it off. :3 I ...

I love how you've expressed the character's feelings; the diction seems so realistic and - more importantly - straight from the heart. :) One thing: Perhaps you could use "But ...

This is excellent! I like your descriptions; they're really interesting! =) One thing I wasn't so sure about was the repetition of 'tentacles' and 'ooze/s' - this is probably personal ...

Your story's short but sweet! =3 Your characters are lively and interesting; your style worked great with the subject matter. :3 The only thing I wasn't so keen on was ...

Your idea is fascinating! You brought out your characters' personalities well, and your dialogue is lovely and natural. One thing, though: The official, two bodyguards, and the head of The ...