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I'm afraid the errors here are just too elementary for me to take this script seriously. Aside from the spelling and grammatical errors, though, the script seemed decent enough; predictable, ...

I do love how you bring the episode full-circle with the mouse joke. ^_^ I am, however, still a little concerned about the "inking" line when they come back to ...

This is simple, yes. Too simple. This is good if you're turning it in for a middle school English project, but if that's not your aim here, it's going to ...

Creased Japanese cherry blossoms fall at Saint Peter's feet like ivory tear drops, pirouetting from the coarse and wiry hair of an arbor bride like some disjointed wedding train. Wow. ...

This poem bothers me a little bit. I understand what you tried to do with the shape of the poem, and I'm familiar with that sort of structure, but it ...

Hmm. This poem is giving me pause for a few reasons: (a) The concept. It's not a bad one; I much prefer poems exploring the nature of settled relationships, their ...

There's potential here; the image of the sea of people and the bubbles struck me as, while somewhat sophomoric, also something that could be built upon. As it is, the ...

The number of mistakes in this, quite frankly, disqualifies it from being even an attempt at poetry. Yes, the structure is missing; that, however, could be forgiven if there was ...

I'm afraid I'm going to have to agree with Brad--though perhaps not so harshly. There is potential here. In particular, I liked the image present in the first line--the conscience ...

This poem has quite a lot of potential, Lady of Fire. Your images, while not necessarily the most original or the most vibrantly conveyed, are solid and easily accessible, and ...

If a man I was involved with wrote this about me, I would kick him to the curb. Save this sort of personal drama for your blog, dear. It does ...

Hm. I'm really not a fan of those form of poetry. To me, it defeats the purpose of poetry--which is placing form and function on equal playing fields. The rhythm, ...

As for the whole "seven" thing--Tolkien was greatly influenced by fairy tales, as well, wasn't he? And the mythology from which those fairy tales sprung? Seven is one of the ...

Note to the Author: As most of my professors--many published and well-esteemed poets and writers--have told me, "If you need to explain your piece, you need to rewrite it." From ...

1.1-1.2 She rejects the morning after, the sun no friend to her. --The comma at the end of the first line is wrong; it should be either a semi-colon or ...