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Baha... this made me giggle a little. It kind of reminded me of the poems I used to read by Shel Silverstein (remember Where the Sidewalk Ends? ) with its ...

Hey there, Nativecatcher! ^_^ Let's take this one step at a time, shall we? (And I'll try to focus on the grammatical things, as you specifically asked for that!) True ...

I like the idea of this -- the sudden and abrupt reversal from 'you' to 'me,' and from 'us' to 'I.' Not only do you switch perspectives, you completely jump ...

Hey there! ^_^ So I'mma break this down into individual comments first, and then give you a more holistic view. Awesome? Awesome! Let's go! I mean those three letters with ...

Chanson!

So! This is my first review in quite some time, so forgive the rust. To start off, let's skim the surface: The building is only used for the occasional rehearsal ...

Ah, but see--while Emma may be boring (not to me, but I know others don't like more archaic styles), it's not a bad book. It's actually very subtly done with ...

[I've run out of time, unexpectedly, and shall only be critiquing the first poem. Apologies!] Poem #1 I like the idea behind these; the malleability of dreams and the future ...

Actually wiseman, what she uses is a slant rhyme--or, as some might know it, a half-rhyme. The words may end in an "f"/"v" sound (which really are pretty similar, anyway; ...

Hey, Kris! You've got a great poem here; the language, despite being so heavily formal (and almost archaic), works well, and you've obviously got the silvered tongue. I just have ...

This is lovely, Mumble! There's such a natural flow and rhythm that although (like people have mentioned before) the slant-rhyme in the first two lines intimate a rhyme pattern that ...

twangleberry Definitely the best description of Edward Cullen I've ever seen. If not, you know, the best description ever. My least favorite is definitely The Old Man and the Sea ...

Truly lovely, Snoinkus! I'm jealous. ^^ I love the description of birth; at first, the mention of God made me nervous, as it generally does in poetry (hazard of shaky ...

I have to say, regardless of my personal stance on the subject--which, I agree, should not affect an objective criticism of the piece--this poem is not one of my favorites. ...

'Lo, Dave. ^^ I have to say, I really enjoyed the airy openness of this poem. I'm generally a punctuation-fascist, but every once in a while something sans punctuation strikes ...