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Re: The Wingless Angel
This was very well written and usually i don't like things starting this there once was. You had alot of phrases you used that i liked. Because she was a ...
Dec 7, 2014 -
Re: Lonely and Suffocating
They are caving in, and I can’t move. I can’t scream. To better you flow you can say. They are caving in, and I can’t move or I can’t scream ...
Dec 5, 2014 -
Re: My guardian.
WOOOOOOOW!!!! This is beautiful. Man i love poetry. I can feel how you feel for this person. how you truly do cherish and love them. It's well written, there where ...
Dec 5, 2014 -
Re: Rot & Ruin: Part 1
Veeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeery interesting. I agree with Cricket on the whole show don't tell there was a whole lot of description. While it was well written it almost went a bit over ...
Dec 5, 2014 -
Re: The System: One
Well this was an interesting read> i can't wait to see what it develops into. I liked how the narrator seemed to be sort of detached from reality more robotic ...
Dec 5, 2014 -
Re: The Before - 01
This was an interesting read. There were a few weird word choices that disrupted the flow of your story. Over all though I like the idea I can't wait to ...
Dec 4, 2014