Fall_Into_The_Sky

I had to copy your story paste it into a new document and reformat the text/font. I will review more it once you post in on the forum not as ...

You were at the bar, tall, [s]and[/s] dark haired and handsome, like all perfect strangers should be. I had pressed stop, at that moment, and ended it so that everything ...

The story was "ok." Things went too fast though. You need to explain the couples relationship further. Also I think it would be ironic if the male character died. Due ...

I didn't find anything to critique :shock: . One word though " more" :elephant:

‘Whaz tha mum?’ she groaned. What's that mom K Mum. ‘ tever you say,’ Whatever You should use “ quotations not ‘ and separate the conversations from the other writing. ...

Wow very good writing skills. I despise rapists :evil: My friend went threw that when she was 10...... :( Looking forward to the next chapter

Where are you going?" Brad asked as I brushed past him. I had my hand on the door knob when Brad yelled, "Fine, ignore me. 'Not my fault Aaron and ...

I especially liked the part where Dylan is running around trying to get ready. That what he get's for goofing off. He better enter the play. The main female characters ...

[pre] Try to change some words up a bit. I like to see unused descriptive writing e.g. Instead of almost afraid. I was petrified or I was almost petrified. Pressing ...

1) How old would you say the MC is? 17- 18 2) For people who read the first part, does she seem to have changed? For better, for worse? For ...

1)Obviously, you continued from part one, so are you still wanting to read further? When do I get to read more? 2) How's my wording? Understandable? I can understand it. ...

1) Is this a good start? Are you compelled to continue the story? Yes I'm wanting to see more 2) Description? Where do I need more, where do I need ...

This was a very touching poem. There might be too many Mathew please don't leave me s though. But I don't know it might just make the poem. These are ...

Ah I so love this story. I'm doing my own lichen story. It's based on a series of dreams over an expansion of about three years. Check it out is ...

I put all my stuff up and we left This should be I picked all my stuff up and we left. He carried my books and we talked forever when ...