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Re: Chasing Rainbows
How beautiful. It flows like poetry. I enjoyed it very much, and honestly I can't find anything that you can fix, how can you fix something thats already beautiful? I'm ...
Jul 9, 2008 -
Re: "Guardians" Prologue
I enjoyed reading this very much, jules4848:) Good flow, a little more description would be nice, but with or without, it is a very good start and I for one ...
Jul 8, 2008 -
Re: I Would Like to Dream
It reads like a poem and story all at the same time. Its truly beautiful. I'm not sure, and this might just be me, (so don't feel obligated to change ...
Jul 7, 2008 -
Re: The lost soldier 2
Hello, I enjoyed both parts of your story, "The Lost Soldier". But I do agree with Sam, they need more description. Don't tell, show. Describe Alyssa's surroundings, the smells, textures, ...
Jul 7, 2008