Faerlan

Hi! *feels silly* I forgot to spellcheck the title, thanks :). Thank you very much for the review, yes I think the main problem is it is too vague and ...

Thank you for the comments, I'll bear them in mind next time. I didn't realise quicksand was one word, although, since my punctuation wasn't debatable at any other point in ...

The most useful thing I was told about haikus is that some of the best ones have a 'twist' at the end. To interest the reader and make the haiku ...

Thank you, I added it in. I was thinking 'to comma or not to comma' because I didn't want it to seam too like the line above. To be honest, ...