ExOmelas

I really want to review this but I'm going to wait for review day... I shall return...

Sure :)

Thank you and yes that was for the co-author but I've edited them out now. Sorry, I was expecting him to read it first. Anyhow, thank you for your input. ...

Thanks Deanie! You give really great reviews. You're always so specific which is very helpful :)

I thought it could do with a little more movement to break up the dialogue but other than that I thought it worked

Oops. There is a longer version of this somewhere. I appear to have uploaded in the middle of a chapter. And I'm glad you're feeling better and there are much ...

I'm really sleepy but I just had to read this before bed. I shall review tomorrow :-)

Oh oops. I added in more Dannel panic in a wfp but forgot to update it. I've been at Reading Festival all weekend with absolutely no internet :)

Just so you know, the tense thing comes up at very specific times. It's usually when you're talking about when 'Caius will be back', where it should be would/could/should depending ...

Hi Romania, Farhan. The n thing goes like "bold 'n' powerful" :)

Okay. If you do make it longer can you give me a link so I can read it?

Hey I'm not reviewing this but see here: 'that is the good god you idiots worship', I think that was uncalled for. There are plenty of kind, decent people who ...

Thank you very much for the review! I will make these edits, wait for more reviews, make more edits, then start on the next chapter :-)

Ah ok. I'll look forward to the other chapters so I can get to know your characters a little better :)

Oh also when I was writing the next chapter I kept accidentally calling Teersin 'he' and changing it. I think I'll just change it all to male :-)