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Hey, Helpful and Navi! It’s great to see a collaboration of two of the site’s strongest poets. ;) And I love the idea of the formatting making the poem itself ...

Hello Horseradish! :D “John?” he whispered sadly, as if moaning only to the mellowed wind. He didn't raise his eyes from the culled dirt beneath his bare feet, too afraid ...

Aww, I didn't enjoy this like I enjoyed the story. One problem is that this can't stand alone, like the story-- I understand it because I've read the story, but ...

This was awesome! Loved the nurse's voice; it was very clear and personal, even through it was in third person. Cool metaphor of a metal coffin for the ship, also. ...

Oops! Forgive the delay. ;) Here as requested. Quick typo: It had to be at close to a ninety degree angle, if not that. So, er, I'm a bit biased ...

Whoa, Anna! You have quite the username, don't you? ;) Regret sniggering by her side. "Sniggering" means "laughing quietly", which I don't think is what you mean here. A girl ...

Naviiiii. So, I know I already gave you some thoughts on Wearing Red, which was my favorite. I liked the whirlwind repetition and how subtly (yet effectively) you transitioned the ...

Not that you care, but this gets me my second blue star, so hoorah! :P So, I don't know what most of this means! Which is actually a problem, since ...

First of all, I'm going to move your four chapters from the Short Story section to the Novel section. Once I've done that, watch this tutorial by Nate on the ...

Hey Timmy! Evi here. Drowning in an ocean of pain I like your first stanza's ideas, save for this. This is angsty and clichéd, so find a more original way ...

Hello Skins! I must warn you, ahead of time, that I know that a personal bias will prevent me from loving this piece even before I've read it. Something about ...

Hey borntoshop. Sarg already gave you a good, thorough review, fixing many of the numerous grammatical and spelling errors here, so do listen to his advice! All of the things ...

Hey Jem! While you obviously have a lot of emotion and powerful prose brewing under these heaping blocks of text, they're hard to access when you're telling us the story ...

Hey sargsauce. I liked this. I'm not sure if I could dislike anything you write, honestly. I feel like I need to go out and buy a foam finger with ...

Hey KitxKat. I haven't read the rest of this, but I'll just comment on the writing in this section. “See you in ten.” Courtney says and I hit the off ...