Evi

Hey armstronge! Evi here. Best of luck in the writing contest. :D His gray suit had became increasingly crumpled, Had become , first of all. Also, 'had become" suggests that ...

Hey Bugbug! I'm Evi. Nice to meet you! :D Please, take everything that I say with a grain of salt-- I am only being honest. So, I haven't read the ...

Hey Goldfish, welcome to YWS. ^_^ Carlos’ advice must always be taken with a grain of salt. Or at least a pound’s worth. But what he was saying had some ...

Sargsauce really hit the nail on the head. I'm going to make some small comments, and then basically echo what he said. My legs were covered in holes from a ...

Hey Yuri! Evi here. So, I thoroughly enjoyed this. xD I, for one, love rhyming poems when they're done well, especially cute unpretentious ones like this. The more intelligent/sophisticated poets ...

Hey Fireful! Fahrvergnügen! At first I thought that this was the fourth chapter in a series of installments, but it seems to haven't posted anything else, so I'm going to ...

So, I'm not good at critiquing lyrics at all, and haven't in ages. It's really hard for me to be helpful without hearing the melody, and my computer won't let ...

Hey Della! Evi here. I agree that a two-part prologue is a bit excessive, especially when they're this long. I'd just label this a prologue. I enjoyed this. :D One ...

Hey Story girl! :D Perseph already gave you a really in-depth critique, so I'm going to be brief. I found this poem hard to follow. You seem to have taken ...

I'm an awful person! I told you to send me an angry PM if I didn't get to this within a week. :P I swear, I'm completely useless without proper ...

Aww, Victoria! I'm also sorry you feel that way, but the fact is, this is a site for critiques. By posting your work you have sent out a request to ...

Hello Racheal! I told you I'd get here sooner or later (although it always seems to end up as later). Small things first. Ha. As if the rag-tag group of ...

He didn't misspell complement , actually. Hey Gal, here as promised. I'm a bit rusty with poetry, but we'll see what we can do! I like the first and last ...

Hey tintin! I'm Evi. So I wasn't particularly fond of this poem, and there are a couple of reasons for this. The first is that you try to rhyme the ...

Congrats on finishing your first short story, Gen! Writing them is the best way to hone your prose skills, in my opinion. It teaches your how to engage readers, develop ...