Evi

Hey, RedRaven! I'm Evi. So, the point of a first chapter is to hook readers in and make them want to read more. Right now, this isn't much of a ...

Hey Ben, sorry for the delay. Cool cover art! Power walking generally got the better of me, and tonight was cold too , only adding to my discomfort . You ...

Hello again! It silent for the next few seconds. It's, perhaps? So, I agree with Kara here on basically every point she made. And I know you can handle a ...

Hey Elinor. Here for the edited version! This won't be long; I need to get on over the Chapter 2. ;) I feel my heart pounding rapidly. Hmm. For me, ...

FABULOUS. I was so hoping you'd post something soon. I'm typing outside by the pool and my internet barely reaches this deck chair, so if the site eats up this ...

Hey Mochi! Sorry it took so long for you to get a second review. I agree with Kyllorac in that the idea behind this is unique and interesting, but the ...

Actually, it is still a poem! ;) Funny how that happens. This won't be long-- I just wanted to stop by to give you some general pointers and opinions. I ...

Psh. You're supposed to PM me when you post. :P Firstly, I'd just title it "The Ribbon Thief". Naivete, shame, love...meh. I have this deep-rooted vendetta against listing in poetry, ...

Hey, BMagic. ;) First of all, airbear gave you a good line-by-line critique; I agree with all of her points, so follow her advice. I'll mainly focus on overall stuff. ...

Hello, FreezGee. ;) I'm Evi. Let's take a look at this thing, shall we? In life, Lexa Hyacinth had been many things: tall, blond haired, brown eyed, slender, athletic, funny, ...

Hey Elinor, me again. I'm not reading the other critiques, so just consider repeated advice as extra reason to edit something. And I warn you beforehand: I'm no history expert, ...

Hello, iWrite. Hope you're enjoying yourself! I noticed that you have three works posted but no reviews-- trust me, you'll get more reviews the more you review. Just pick out ...

Yeah, you might not be too worried about the paragraphs, but readers are. And in this state it's nearly impossible to read. So if you'd like critiques, you're going to ...

Hey iheartbooks! Evi here, as requested. ;) Please know that I am in no way discouraging you from writing, and I say everything to help you grow as an author. ...

You like Greek Mythology, huh? :D Awesome. I'm not going to comment on the factual sources of the myths, because, unlike our resident Greek Myth Historian Antigone, I have no ...