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Re: Exile - Chapter 1 - Part 1
I agree with JazzberryJam in her points, but here are a few other things I found. 'Twas nightfall in the kingdom of Xarifaa where young elf Tristan was stealthily climbing ...
Jul 3, 2009 -
Re: Timekeeper
Seven minutes left now ; it was almost time. In most instances of numbers, unless it’s something like a year or 423,478, it should be spelled out. Since these are ...
Jul 3, 2009 -
Re: Project Lazurus
Squares of dusty light danced around the library. The air was thick with the smell of ancient paper. This might look better as one sentence. “Squares of dusty light danced ...
Jan 5, 2009 -
Re: Deltora Series
I used to love the series when I was about 12 or 13, and I think it introduced me to the epic fantasy genre (though I'm not too sure Deltora ...
Jan 4, 2009 -
Re: Haven
This was pretty interesting so far. The whole “people getting sucked into games” plot has been around for a while, but I’d like to see where this one goes. Aside ...
Jan 4, 2009
