Envy-the-Sinners

Hey Jiggity, You're welcome! What you said makes sense. :) It reads more like a (short) story than a novel, I think. Now you can just ignore my comments on ...

Thanks for the reviews! They're really helpful. :) I'll keep all of your suggestions in mind as I rewrite and finish this piece. I pronounce Cerys as Keh-ris . It's ...

Thank you so much for the reviews! I understand what you mean about hooking the reader. I see now that I wasn't really telling the reader anything about Cerys or ...