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Re: First work of poetry exploring the area
Great Job! The only nit pick I can find is how you start to rhyme halfway through. Maybe change it so it is all rhyming or all not, other than ...
Dec 3, 2010 -
Re: White Ravens
I love this poem but one thing I found was I watched as the sunrose bright and round. I wonder if it knew that terror had come 'round. Maybe you ...
Dec 2, 2010 -
Re: Awakened
Hi i'm here to reveiw! First of all although I don't believe in god myself but I found this a very good poem. Only if He would show His hand ...
Dec 2, 2010 -
Re: Adam's Suicide Note
Hi i'm BuzzBee :) I really like this note it kept me interested the whole time just for an idea, if you were going to use it in a novel ...
Dec 1, 2010 -
Re: Of Melody and Death
Hi i'm BuzzBee I hope I can help! He leaves her there to rot alone Thus is the way he has always known I like this, it flows well and ...
Nov 29, 2010 -
Re: Saving Earth~Kinderland Chapt. 1
Arial fluttered in and out of a dream Should it maybe be 'Arial fluttered in and out of what seemed like a dream' because you have continued to say what ...
Oct 28, 2010