EloquentDragon

Well, okay that was.... interesting. The problem here is juxtaposition. While I think the strangeness and haunting poetic aspects of the prose could work with the subject matter, it was ...

Well hello again. You may remember me from my review on your... other story. I'll try and help you out with a couple things here. Line-by-line below: Erfurt, Germany. 2115. ...

ED here with a few short comments. First off, this isn't my normal reviewing style. Usually I pick something apart as I read along, putting the things that bug me ...

I'll be your faithful reviewer for today, hope I can help. "Ever since the death of the King and Queen, the life of Azariah is slowly weakening.." What? Azariah is ...

ED here to review. I have not seen/read any form of Star Trek whatsoever, so I am rather worthless when it comes to that. However, I can comment on story, ...

bottled tight and sunk straight to the bottom. Nice metaphor, I like thte wat this starts.] ‘That 70’s Show’. Back then, I didn’t care about things the way I do ...

Okay, let me be clear here: there are probably a billion poems out there about trains. (And subways.) This is not a bad thing, but it also means that you ...

ED here to review. To tell you the truth I grabbed this guy since it was the first one at the top of the list. But then I noticed your ...

ED here to review. Grammatical fixes below: As i-the "i" need to be in red. head to school sleepy in the cold winter of Baghdad, putting on my white freezing ...

Hah hah. I'm mostly reviewing this because I want to disagree with Percy. :p (Oh that god of poetic expertise!) But anyway, I loved this. The thing I actually found ...

First of all, I am just going to say here that I wasn’t able to be as thorough as I normally am, and that is simply a logistical matter. You ...

Well, let me just say that I can't find anything to say about this. It was wonderful. Wonderully, gut-wrenchingly realistic. I haven't really thought that much about how image effects ...

I’m not big on reflecting, Maybe that should be “reflection.” the police didn’t know about some of the more questionably legal activities I’ve gotten up to. I don’t think it ...

So please don’t take any of this the wrong way. It wasn’t my intention to sound “harsh,” but I have read some of the stuff you’ve wrote and I know ...

ED here to review. This is "nice," yes, but is altogether too rough. The rhyme, while interesting, is often "forced/contrived" and grammatically awkward. And you slip out of pattern in ...