EllyMelly

Good Morning, *writewatiwant*. Here are some of my comments and/or suggestions: 1) When reading the first sentence, I felt like there could be more to it. Like here: * I ...

Good Afternoon, Ashley. Here are some of my comments and/or suggestions: 1) While reading I immediately thought of Cranford (Gaskell) about the gossiping folk and the works of Dickens, of ...

Good Morning, Jasmine. Here are some of my comments and/or suggestions: 1) When I was reading the first sentence, I seriously thought Jesse was a female. And then I thought ...

Good Late Morning, Jasmine. Here are some of my comments and/or suggestions: First here's a little mistake: I followed his gaze to my dress. It was an expensive gown that ...

Good Morning, Jasmine. Here are some of my comments and/or suggestions: 1) This first part was mentioned as Lizzie's POV. Is she the narrator for the whole story or is ...

Good Afternoon, Ashley. Wow. Like I said before I was immediately captivated into this novel. I don't know why, but I am. You know I never heard of Hallmark, South ...

Good Afternoon, Ashley. First off, I couldn't see any grammar mistakes or any minor or major mistakes. So kudos to you! One of the major reasons I didn't pay attention ...

Good Afternoon, Angel! Okay, like the first sentence made me laugh! Zombies? Reminds me a lot of my sister. (she loves all things zombies) I have a question here, is ...

Hey Angel (mind if I just call you that?), Wow. Like really, wow. This. Was. Intriguing. I'm serious. After reading this part, I knew I was in the mood to ...

Hey Evangelinne, Prologue: When I first read the beginning paragraph, I thought the girl was in a hospital. Is she? Because I couldn't really tell. But, I do like how ...