EliteHusky

I think you knew what you are doing when you were writing this story but here are some suggestions. Break it up. The solid sentences one after the other is ...

It really grabbed my attention and appealed to me just by it's size. I was surprised how wonderful the poetry just drifted along the entire piece and did not loom ...

When I read this through it sounded awfully like a dream that was written down on paper with more detail. It is very unpredictable and while that may appear as ...

This is quite interesting and somewhat appealing. I would recommend that you use Times New Roman (default) font and ans the previous comment said, just write it instead of hosting ...

You can really visualize what you're writing in this poem, the only possible bit that I was a caught on was the use of a question mark which I do ...

Like the other replies the first half was really innovative and poetic however as it continued it just seemed to drift too far apart losing my interest and didn't quite ...