Elinor

Hiya, This is a nice piece. I love how you build up suspense and tension throughout, and some of your word choice and sentence structure is just lovely. However, what ...

Hiya, As a writer, you need to show the reader that you sincerely care about what you're writing. I don't feel that I get that out of you. There's a ...

Hiya, So there are a lot of things I really like and a lot of things that I really don't like about this story. It's definitely very sweet and a ...

Hi, Forest! So, I just had a few comments. First, I just wanted to say that the general idea and emotion you put into this piece is done well. I ...

Hiya, So, this is definitely a nice idea. I also really like what you're trying to achieve with present-tense. You keep it very consistent, unlike some other people I've seen ...

Hiya, When I opened this poem up I was curious to see what I would find. There are quite a few poems about school but not really any about the ...

Hiya, This was a very cute poem and it made me giggle at the end. This will be a short review since this really is execellent and I don't have ...

Hiya, This story was, for the lack of a better word, boring. There isn't much to it at all; a girl goes to the pond, swims around, gets bored and ...

Hiya, I'm really sorry that something like this had to happen to you. Going through a similar experience myself, I understand how you must feel. That being said, I'm so-so ...

Hiya, Indifference; that's my feeling toward this story. I don't hate it, as your writing is pretty solid (aside from a few grammatical errors here and there). However, what leaves ...

Hiya, Kyllorac and Stella have made wonderful points so I'll try not to tread on them too much. I want to like this story so, so much. You have a ...

Hiya, I'll start off by saying that this is really clever. I love how you've split it up into three parts; something about that just seems to make sense. I ...

Hiya, This is a really cute poem and I absolutley adore how simplistic it is. It's one of those poems that is really touching despite not going into too much ...

Hiya, Short review today. I'm not sure what to think about this story. My immediate reaction to this is both that of admiration and shock. You start of this story ...

Hiya, So, I see you've entered this into Blink's contest--best of luck! Before I get into the meat of the review, I just wanted to quickly mention something about your ...