Eleriann

hey again, i like the direction your keeping but your characters all react really dramatically it seems and possibly sometimes they dont need to be so... well dramatic i guess. ...

Hey im really enjoying your story, the idea is really good and the characters seem quite well thought but alot of the time your experession seems a bit off and ...

hey i really like this, i think youve depicted the nervousness of the speaker and the way the mother picks up on it very well and i love the ending.. ...