Eimear

Brilliant. All the suggestions are great. Better get reading then- or at least, going to the library! xxxx

I'm reading Death of a Salesman for English A2. We've only got to a couple of pages, but I think it's good. I'll post a review when we're done with ...

I'm sorry but I agree. I've recently read the Book Thief, and this is just far too similar for a proper critque.

My first book I ever wrote. It was horrendous, really, very bad. However I hear the writer is very good looking so that makes up for it. XD

**Second draft Death lives far away Facing a small reflection, through the glass that separates the young from the wise, I saw them. Reaching out, at the slip of a ...

Thank you all so much for such quick and in-depth replies. Each one is greatly appreciated, and will help me so so much in editing this. Hugs* Eimear xx

Wow, thanks for all the great responses. Right now the reason there's no beat is because these are the raw lyrics without any music. I'm saving up for a keyboard ...

Wow, really wasn't expecting this many replies! I appreciate the time each person took to read it. And I think I might join everyone in the stabbing of the last ...

Will review in the morning. Here's my promise. Eimear

Whoa! This topic's old. Ha- in both senses. Well I guess you've already revised this or maybe even forgotten about it but I've started so I'll finish...bit cliched, bit repetitive, ...

Haha. This is bloody brilliant! Seriously, it's not even a human's voice and it's so completely orginal you make my own writing seem stilted and usless. I can't really add ...

Thanks for the great review :D

Thanks for the great reviews, guys!

Vernon, you'd be surprised to know that I hadn't a singer in mind when I wrote this poem. I was actually holding my six week old neice the other day ...

This was good, not much to critque. Make it a little longer perhaps? What does everyone else think? Nice job, though. I really felt like you conveyed the theme of ...