Earthfire713

Welcome to YWS! First of all, great job on this. The imagery was beautiful and I could visualize it really well. My suggestions: Surrounded by the forest that was holding ...

Wow. That is a really unique way to write a prologue. Great job! That would be so creepy to listen to that on the phone. Anyways, I found a nitpick ...

Hey, Enigma! I really liked this story. The description was wonderful and I could picture what was going on vividly. My only comment is that it seems...too like the book, ...

Hi silentpages! Wow. This was amazing. So sad, but amazing. You did such a great job at pulling at our heartstrings and retelling this story of the "Little Mermaid". Sorry, ...

Hi FreakyDeaky! I'm Earthfire, and I'll be your reviewer today. I really liked this story. It's original and the beginning caught my attention right away. :smt001 Great job! The only ...

Hi LauraElizabeth! I'm Earthfire and I'll be your reviewer. First of all: Bravo! :smt001 This was a really interesting story which drew me right in. I love how you kept ...

Hi RiverStar! That was beautiful. I loved how you described everything so poetically, it just brought the image of the story to my mind. There are just a few things ...

Hi LaReina! I really liked this story. You made it seem authentic and just right for the time period that you're writing about. The only suggestion that I have is ...

Hello! This story was cool. I really liked how you described the creature. I just have a few nitpicks that I found: Jamie could just see a muscular tail propping ...

Hi KAH! I'm Earthfire. I'm not really good at reviewing poetry, but I'll give this a try. I've read the book Crispin, by the way, so I think it's cool ...

Hi RainWanderer! I'm Earthfire and I'll be your reviewer today. This story made me laugh. I love over-dramatizing everyday stuff too. Great job! :smt001 I didn't see the word "hot" ...

Hi! I really liked this story. You were telling it in a "proper" voice which added to the effect. :smt001 Great job! The only thing I was wondering about was ...

Hi Allessandre! I'm Earthfire and I'll be your reviewer today. First of all, I just want to remind you about punctuation. You forgot to put apostrophes and periods in some ...

Hi! This was really cool. I don't think I would be able to do that sort of challenge. The only thing that I would suggest doing is making it more ...

This was a really good essay. Great job! :smt001 The only thing that I would suggest is explain the plot of "Othello" at the beginning for those who haven't read ...