ELven-Maiden

O_O :shock: You aren't stopping, are you?

Only a grammar mistake that your english teacher probably won't like: Here is more of the story. The Grey Woman themselves are grey as their name says and they are ...

I like this. It captures the attention of your readers and sets the story immediatly. After that, I can ony echo what Pages said. Keep writing! I'm excited to see ...

Okay, I've patched up the battlescene. Please tell me what you think!!! *Pleading glance* :P

A few typos, missing words and letters, but I'm not that good at them either, so I can't talk. :P I thought this was really good! There were some awkward ...

Wow. Kinda creepy. You did a great job. You really freaked me out. The tone is perfect, though really creepy. I was shuddering through the whole thing. (I wasn't using ...

the Aiekeir i told you was ten years old. This is the 24-year-old Aiekeir. there's a huge different. when something as sudden and drastistic happens, your personality usually changes just ...

yeah, i'll see what i can do about the scene where they confront the magicians. but i suck at battlescenes and I'm working on them right now...

It seems too rushed. i don't understand anyting that's going on. i don't know when someones talking, whos talking, and what they are trying to say., when you make it ...

Thanx for ur crit, Elelel! Myles hates it when someone just appears from nowhere. there's an entire history behind that. and he only holds Rame because he knows that Niyana's ...

i like it! especially the ending. it gives you a punch in the stomach. i liked the character development, especially. but, i couldn't really imagine Kyle or Joanne. or the ...

I like it. it's short, only a few lines, but it still makes you think. i like poems like that. It has a real meaning, behind the few words and ...