Duskglimmer

I liked that alot. Beautiful imagery. I especially liked the last five lines. Great Job!

Fifteen minutes later a cloud sprang up. It was almost impossible to see until they were right on top of it and from the outside it seemed docile and harmless. ...

Thanks for reading. Chapter 7 I sat down at the table across from Stren and Sean. “There you are,” Stren said. “Where have you been all morning?” “That’s some greeting,” ...

Thanks to both of you. Areida - Could you possibly tell me where the paragraphs would need to be broken up specifically? I thought I'd kept my paragraphs pretty short ...

*takes a bow* thank you very much!

I think this should either be changed and lengthened and made into a story, or the wording should be rearranged a little and made more colorful... just my thoughts...

Uh... I'm not sure exactly why it mattered where the light was and where the dark was... that's the reason that I didn't feel the need to try and define ...

The exact topic was this: Me and a friend both liked the same guy. She had been dating him for several months before I came along and slowly, he started ...

I like it. Can't really find anything to complain about.

I think the structure and flow is a little off, but all in all, excellent job. It was fun to read. Keep it up.

It's interesting... I think the thought patterns of the person aren't quite random enough... it's a bit too easy to follow for it to believably be a crazy person, but ...

Wow... I can't tell you the number of times that I've tried to write something along these lines, and completely failed. You did a terrific job with it. Well done!

See above.

Thanks. I really just wrote the poem to get some of the thoughts inside my head OUT. But then I loved the last line and felt the need to show ...

I think it could have been cut a little shorter, like they said, but I really liked it. Especially the last stanza.