Durriedog

Thankyou! That was helpful. I think I'll re-write that part... 'twould be wise.

Thanks :D This might sound far-fetched, but Balema is completely flat except for mountains etc. Also each territory is quite large. Just wanting to clear that up... Silly Durrie. Durrance ...

... *mouth falls open in shock*

Thank you!

Thank you! :smt023 Your first review for almost a year? *feels special* :lol: I will take your reviews to heart. :D Durrance

Thankyou!!! Please excuse my bad spelling :D

Because they hold so much air, Pen! It's happened to me before!

I think it should have something to do with water, because you mention that alot. Maybe 'Drifting', or 'Drifted'? Hope it helped. Durrance :smt023

Hmm, thank you again! Will be re-writing soon.

Thank you for the help!!!

Thank you very much!!! Your advice will become usefull and I will be quick to look through all chapters before posting, as sharp readers will be quick to put me ...

Thank you! I'm pleased that someone liked it. Thank you for your editing. It is much appreciated. :D Next Chapter to come soon.

At first the last two lines rhyming was like an odd blow, because I'm really not used to it. Every line I was like, "Oh, Okay!" and continued reading. But ...

Just one thing; I don't know if the extra information you're giving us is important to the storyline, but it seems like a lot of the info is unneeded and ...

It's an arch-angel, and unlike other angels arch-angels are not just for flying around worshiping God. Arch-angels are much more in the now, and they actually do things. In my ...