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Re: Prologue and Chapter One: Orders
Hey Shadow, I'm here, so let's dive right in! I'm going to go with overall opinions first and nitpicks last. First of all, I would try to introduce the main ...
Jun 20, 2012 -
Re: Voices: Welcome to the Games
Hello angelhunter, I'm here for the review I promised. I agree with the advice of the reviewers who came before me on this one. (TheDayBT and JabberHut hit the nail ...
Jun 8, 2012 -
Re: Elven Sword Fight
Hello again Shadow, You re-reviewed my work, so it's only fair for me to do the same! You're already familiar with my style of review so I'll just jump right ...
May 31, 2012 -
Re: The True Mighty Emperor of the Zanrel- Chapters 1 and 2
Review Time! This is going to be long and picky (My style, sorry I can't really help it. There is a reason I don't have a review thread of my ...
May 14, 2012 -
Re: The Sun Children V - The Princess' Crown - Chapter Six
Part two Engage! {“M…Men, protect your princess} If you want to make the character stutter his speech, then use a dash (M-Men). ". . ." implies a long pause or ...
May 2, 2012 -
Re: The Sun Children V - The Princess' Crown - Chapter Six
OK review part 1! {There were many citizens who had walked from their homes to witness the bright burning court across Ringwater Bridge.} I would remove "had walked" with "emerged" ...
May 2, 2012 -
Re: Hope in the ashes
Hi dreamingthelife! I'm no expert, so take this review with a grain of salt. I was very impressed with the level of detail and description. A few of my favorite ...
Apr 17, 2012 -
Re: Elven Sword Fight
Hey Shadow! I thought I would return the favor and review this piece for you. It's not going to be that detailed, because I think the other reviewers hit the ...
Apr 17, 2012 -
Re: Exodus [Prologue]
*Disclaimer* Please take this review with a grain of salt. It has been a long time since I read fiction in my free time. I'm pretty new here (first review) ...
Apr 16, 2012
