DrunkOnWriting

A very well written first chapter! I love this style of writing and was intrigued by the storyline. The dialogue was natural and your descriptions were very nice. Just one ...

Absolutely delicious first paragraph! I loved how elogantly you were able to describe a lego city. My favorite part by far was the tentative first meeting. As horrible as this ...

This poem made me smile...how unfortunately true this is:) Just a few little nit picks: to her grace has no compare. should probably be "have" instead of "has without her, ...