Dragoon120

^_^ I plan on clearing up what's going on in the next chapter, and I'll work on describing that cell (Now that you mention it, a metal cot and see-through ...

Umm... First off, the holographic keyboard comment was just humor on Laurel's part- not a serious thought. Second, Laurel is the writer who was stolen from our present day by ...

^_^ It was no problem. Also, everyone struggles with grammar at some point, so you're not alone on that.

I've edited. Hopefully there are not so many ellipses, and some things are clearer to understand. :)

I'm planning to edit this chapter when I have time. :) Thank-you for your review.

Luck, sadly, will not follow her. Resurrection is, in my idea of what it should be, heavily based on choices. Like what one does in a story they have already ...

All I can say is, wow. No nitpicks on my part! I hope to see more of this!

I'll work on the description of Adriana to be mentioned subtly, as you have suggested. That was the part I often read over and wondered if I should have worked ...

Thanks! I'll get to editing!

The reason I started addressing her as think besides her name, was the simple fact that I felt like over used it in the first chapter. I'll work on it, ...

Uh, it's fantasy... But, thank-you all the same...

That was my attempt! :) I wanted Nevar to be unique, but also be able to connect with the traditional fantasy. It's nice to know the work payed off! :)

Thanks! I'll work on sentence flow. :)

:) Thanks! I will defiantly work on my editing. The fact alone that someone finds it a good read is enough motivation to continue writing it. :)

:) Thanks! I will defiantly work on my editing. The fact alone that someone finds it a good read is enough motivation to continue writing it. :)