DoomBlade87

Reality store??? I remember that, I came up with this really complicated thing where my first born child who I had with my divorced second husband was a piano prodigy ...

So it's about.......insanity? No probably not. >< Actually I'm kidding, Pippi told me what this was about, but that's just what I would/might be thinking if I had just read ...

O-O It....be....so....COOL. Love the voice, love the hinting of plot and background, love kickass girls in general. I'm going to go read the next part now. Rite on. :P

I like it. I like Astor, it's always good to have someone who likes to talk to get some development going. By the way, did you ever tell us what ...

I.....er......don't get it. =.= Okay maybe......a little.....but it's so confuzzeling......maybe if i read it again. *approximately twelve seconds later* Nope still don't get it. Maybe it's about.....

It's a......thing. I respect the thing. Yes I do. =.= Anyway, I like it. I like it awfully much. ^^ I can't think of anything to correct, so that must ...

I know you said it's not an actual story seems rushed. There's too much stuff that isn't explained and not enough detail. Sort of like it's a page torn out ...

Uhhh.......it's.......okay. The thing with the hair seems kind of random, and why would she be afraid just because her hair stayed clean and she couldn't cut it? Is it a ...

ITS ITS ITS ITS!!!! .....I forgot. Oh well! It couldn't have been very important if I forgot. Anyway, I liked it! It gave the impression of urgentness-ness and kind of ...

You're so right. They never go to the bathroom. So I guess that no matter the story fictional characters all have one common super power....bladders of steel. O-O I wish ...

SORRY THE ONLY THING I CAN THINK OF TO SAY IS, "GOOD WILL ALWAYS WIN" IS SO FUNNY!!!!! (bear in mind that i am an evil twin as well as ...

Muuuuuuuuucccchhhh better PippiChan. It actually makes sense. Congrats on using peoples suggestions in making it a bit more realistic without totally contradicting what you previously wrote. :P Though

I feel Adalyn needs more...character. She's just not....realistic? I don't know, it just feels like she's too.....obvious. Hazel would have to be reasonably air headed and/or thick not to put ...

I just.....don't get it. ^^' Is that bad? Who're the Sista's supposed to be? At first I thought maybe night and day but the whole 'feastn 'pon yur soul' stuff ...

Oooooooo it's....creepy. ^^ I respect that. it'd be better if there weren't so many grammar/spelling errors, I just had to say that. And it'd be nice if there was more ...