DonicaSage

Hey, I like how this flows. It definitely is connotation for sadness, loneliness, hurt, and "complete disintegration". Italicizing the third paragraph was a great idea, since its was a deviation ...

I like this too! The dialogue is smooth. The whole read is fast and enjoyable. This part made me laugh “What was Bremer like?” His speech was lightening fast. “Full ...

Hello, Harry, Donica here. First, I would say that the title of your story is an attention grabber. :D This piece made me want more. The suspense is there, and ...

Hi, Robert, Donica here. I think that there is premise with this piece, and i like the fact that your story is called The beginning. But I agree with Dogs ...