DisposableHero

I'm reading it at the moment and I love it. I don't see how a story-line like hers could be considered flat. I have not read any of her other ...

I think this story would be better if it were longer. Good idea and message, but you could definately improve it. Well done though.

That is a very stereo typical view to take of teenage girls, but you did portray what you wanted to. A little less dialogue maybe. I think it would be ...

I really like it. The way you balance dialogue and description works well and the characters are definately interesting. Maybe you should make the first paragraph a little different though, ...

Hey there and welcome! This piece is full of raw emotions and it's very well written. The one thing I would say is that it's not the most unique of ...

I really liked this. Your writing style is engaging and I was interested in the story from the start. Crowds of grief stricken parents surrounded the car This kind of ...

Hey, DisposableHero! I like your writing style very much- it's emotional, but very beautiful and flows without a hitch. You have an interesting conflict, too, which is always nice to ...

I loved it because it was just so original and quite educational at the same time.