DestinyIsCalling

I'm terrible at grammar so forget it. Hi! I love your story! It's very vivid, clear, precise, descriptive... Only a couple of things: 1. Um, how old is Nova? Is ...

So... Good thing: You are using a style of writing I haven't seen recently: a kind of Nancy Drew-fast-forward-adult-science style. It's often used in adult books, in a straightforward, dull ...

Ooh! Nice beginning. Actually, great beginning. I am no good at grammar, so I'm sorry, I'll just be reviewing. Great Thing I loved your preface. Besides the fact that it ...

Alright then! So, about the story... Good thing: You have a great idea, a story about torture. The way you wrote it was enough to make me feel freaked out ...

Alright. I'm horrible at grammar, so I'm going to skip just to reviewing. I love you description of the Universe, but it felt overly complicated and dense. When I started ...

Your poem has a good theme and moral, or whatever you want to call it. However, I agree that the rhymes are a little flat and predictable. :lol: I know ...

Wow...I can't really say this cleverly, but, you captured dance perfectly . I dance myself and I can understand what you are trying to say, how each and every movement ...