Demeter

Hi, Lav-Lav! This was rather intense. I really liked the beginning; it was creepy, which I like, and sucked me in, which is obviously what you want. I think that ...

Hello Jalmoc! You posted on my WRFF ages ago and I'm so sorry for not dropping by sooner. I've really been such a rusty reviewer these past months. Micah woke ...

Hey, JCK! Finally here :) First of all, I love the Atlantis logos between the paragraphs. It gives this such a professional look, not to mention that the logo is ...

Daughter! I'm very sorry it took me this long, I only noticed your request today... :( Well, this was really good. I was hooked from the very first "my coffin" ...

Hi, Ed! Sorry that I didn't review this until now :o There is little to this stone town, too small of stores to buy anything useful and too few to ...

Stellanineee! “I hear you killed Jameson. Good job. Good riddance.” I like this as an opening line, but it might be even more effective if it was just "I hear ...

Hi JP! Definitely you can request reviews on my wall, that actually makes it easier for me to remember :D Her parting word , etched in black ink on a ...

Hi there, American Teenager! I'll hide in the corner I'll cry alone I'll shy away Let someone else be the star I'll shy away I didn't feel this was the ...

Hello there, MMMBop! once i played piano for constellations, spread apart like sheet music This is an absolutely lovely beginning, caught my interest right away. because like they i was ...

Hello, Spyndlethread! Wow -- you write rhyming poetry exceptionally well! "Beauty" to some is a pretty face, to others, nature's quiet grace; Beautiful, beautiful. "Nature's quiet grace" is lovely, an

Hello there, Matthewclarke! Let's see what you have here. My perennial silhouette blackens my dark cold heart, "Perennial silhouette" is amazing, so beautiful. "Dark cold heart" is a bit cliché, ...

Hi, Circle! I don't think I've read anything by you before :) Wherever Thee be, Thou art shall be there; I was a bit confused by this. Doesn't "thou art" ...

Hi Wranna! Welcome to the YWS! :) Because I was crying, crying softly While you sang for one last time What does the "because" belong with? Because there's a reason, ...

Hi, Scarlett! I agree with the previous reviewer that this created a sort of peaceful mood. However, I'm not sure if that was your intention, with the hops and skips ...

Hi, Xreigon! I highly recommend giving this a some kind of title. If you don't like what you previously had, use it anyway and change it later -- you're much ...