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Haha, great! Thank you :)

Does it read better now?

Thank you! I know I immediately shy away from long poems, especially without stanzas (which was my own uploading error), thank you very much for your review. I'm so glad ...

Thank you! :) I actually didn't have Ancient Greece in mind, but I love that period in History, so if that's what you thought of, I'm so glad! :D I ...

Thank you for the review, sorry I had stanzas but I must have uploaded it wrong, hopefully that's fixed now?;/

Oh yeah, I know, I've listened to a few suggestions, not all though:/ Sorry about the lack of paragraphs, I didn't upload it properly! :/

Thank you, yes I like those suggestions, I shall get editing! :)

Thank you very much! Glad you enjoyed it! :)

Thank you, I understand where you're coming from with all that advice, I have this poem labelled as "unfinished" in my mind, so that's why the ending is short of ...

Thank you so much! That was such a helpful review, and you managed to point out all the weak points of my writing!! I love descriptions, but I'm terrible when ...

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Hi ShadowVyper, Wow, again! You've continued this story with just as much flare and raw intensity as before. Thank you again for the notice when you posted these pieces...and three ...

Thanks so much! Yeah I know! I had it submitted in paragraphs but it didn't post right :(

Hey Maverick, Wow, this piece is so amazing! You immediately transported me to glorious summer days, and captured the addictive, sugary whirlwind of summer romance. I LOVED this poem, and ...

Hi TheSilentBagpipe, First of all, love your username :) And secondly, I love your poem even more! This is such a heartfelt and adorable piece, your friend really is very ...

Thank you so much! I'm so glad you liked it :)