Deathcurrent

Nice. If you make this into a music video, you'll have to post the link. I enjoyed the chorus. It seems to explain what every one feels, yet what is ...

I like it, though it was a little longer than I normally like. I recommend, in the future, to try for a shorter one. If this is your style though, ...

That's deep. I like it a lot, and I might think about asking you if I could use a similar version, or this one if it's okay with you in ...

I like it. A lot, I'm big into these types of fantasy and you've done a fabulous job with this chapter. I just have one thing, at the beginning, you ...

Wow! That was freaky, but really good. I like how "the stalker" could be a person, or another thing entirely. It gives a dimension of freedom to the reader. Though ...

NICE! I can't wait to read the next chapter. At one point, when the daughter is asking her father something, it gets a little confusing. May want to take a ...