Deanie

Hey again :) Well, this chapter looked absolutely spotless in all areas to me. There were no obvious technical mistakes, and the story was just moving forwards. Dave just keeps ...

Hey Dark Raven, Another reasonable chapter. You can clearly see the memories are resurfacing faster and stronger than before. Dave must have some pretty nice friends if they are willing ...

Hola It gets more awkward for greetings as I am really just writing all these reviews in a row. SO! The beginning was interesting. I see you dumbed it down ...

Right, I'm back and ready to continue reading the story :) This chapter was good. Mandy got to meet her new dad, and it's still all fine and dandy with ...

Allo again. Bored of me yet? :P A bit of a longer chapter to review here. I've been reviewing this as I go along, so excuse the unorganized review. All ...

Hello again, This was a pretty short part to the story, and it looks pretty good. We finally get to see this new Mandy, and it's great how you set ...

Greetings ^^ What I already love about this chapter by just reading the first paragraph alone, is that you already get a sense of his emotions and of Mandy's character. ...

Happy Review day! Wow. Just wow. Great use of emotion in this chapter. You manage to convey his distress and sadness of losing Mindy to the new her - Mandy. ...

Hello again. A good chapter. It's like how you keep referring to superhero's and the sorts, because it definitely keeps Dave in character. I'm also liking the relationship you've mapped ...

Hello Dark Raven Can you believe in the time between this review and the first, I've watched the first movie? By chance my sister brought it home because she borrowed ...

Hi there Dark Raven, I can see that I setting myself up for a lot of hard work. Already there's lots posted into bits, and although I'm reviewing this first ...

Another interesting chapter, Willow. It was funny how they were indeed ambushed, and Eli's little outburst at the end told us what happened. I'm sad to see that the police ...

Hey Willow, I've decided not to bug you about all the grammar things today. I am just going to mention one thing one more time, and that's sentence structure. I ...

Hey Willow, So, this was an interesting close to the flashback scenes and back into reality. I think you should use those breaks in scenes that I showed you in ...

Hey there Grimm! Deanie here to give you a response for your review as well :) I liked the idea you have in this poem. I understand that you are ...