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Wookie this isn't the first chapter?

Hey, time for some more critiquing Later on at break I sat reading at a table then someone came and sat down next to me . I removed was and ...

Thanks for all the reviews guys! I have taken everything to mind and this shall hopefully improve my next piece.

Thanks form and I am happy I got to be your first review! If you thought it was good the prologue offered some background information although nothing on the character. ...

Thanks to both of you! I shall try and make Kyle seem more like a sibling. The whole ravage thing starts when the announcer is done talking, but she was ...

I third the Uglies trilogy and his other book Extras which was amazing as well. I doubt you haven't read them, but check out the hunger games and catching fire.

I think there is a homework forum somewehre ^^ It is under lounge (subforum)

Thanks everyone I appreciate the critique/comments.

Yes, it was incredibly sad the entire school mourned him.

Woah a fifteen year old girl who hasnt read twilight! I am inpressed. BTW: I personally love criticism, but what I cant stand is when the people I let read ...

Thanks aqua! Sadly the games are not the main topic though...

Thanks empress and Ben. First, and I would like to direct this at everyone, do not think you are being overly harsh or ridiculous. I understand completely that what a ...

Hello Daydreams, This piece is pretty good, but I noticed a lot of similarities to Scott Westerfeld's Uglies series. It also kind of reminded me of the Matrix somewhat. You ...

Thanks for being the first to comment I appreciate it! As for the actual work I turned in I fixed bungee in both incidents although it would appear that I ...

Thanks for the comments guys! Now here is a reply to you all @Jasmine: I will go try and review your poetry although it is not my strong point. @Daisy: ...