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You should probably pace yourself. Chapter 23 has just been completed yesterday, which means there's another 18 more chapters to go... After this one :) And I think this novel's ...

I think I can see what you're getting at with the mood transition. Alright. :)

It's fine, you must be really tired :)

Yeah, well, and I'm saying that by doing so it may detract from her character, and like I said, I will try to do so without destroying her character in ...

lol am I so bad a writer that deliberate spelling mistakes seem unintentional!? :D The problem with being detailed with Mindy is that I'm writing from her perspective, be it ...

And thanks for your time too :)

Alright, I like your comment on the dream sequence. :) I was hoping to use the form and lack of narrative detail to create a state of confusion, dream-like quality ...

I'm afraid I've committed a great error. I thought this was chapter one of the novel. Turns out to be chapter two. Which means there might be one or two ...

Still, it seems to break the immersion a bit... Typical Americans certainly won't think in British English... Do they? :D :D :D Plus, I hate to include non-diegetic info in ...

Nice, you've pointed out some things that even a second drafting did not detect. Reusing vocabulary (the flipping bit) is certainly inexcusable to me. My gosh! How could I! As ...

Admittedly, I did not know what all of them are. Researched on a few, but I guess I fell short. I'll make sure I do so, because I might need ...

No problem, I'm glad I can help.

Not a problem there, buddy. When I commit myself to something, I try to make sure I do it all the way.

Hmm interesting observations you have there. Whether 'Taken aback' is acceptable or not, I think, depends on personal taste? I tried Taken back, but it sounds like physically being taken ...

That's some remarkable enthusiasm you have there. It'd be a shame if something were to happen to it... :) haha jk. I'll import the next section soon-ish. Shouldn't be that ...