Cotton

Wow. Such a dark story! I really hope you're just naturally talented at creating a creepy character rather than anything else! Because Jack is so... precisely what you want him ...

Hey! This is just the right length for a first section, so it's nice and easy for me to read and comment on in my poor, about-to-go-back-to-school lethargy. Thank you ...

Hi! I'm not going to very helpful, so I apologise in advance for that. This is really too long for one post... so I would suggest removing at least chapter ...

Hi there! First of all, welcome to YWS! I know that it was quite daunting when I first started, so if you have any questions please do PM me, or ...

Hey! It's really different, and since I recently went to a Live-Literature evening and saw some people perform - yes, perform - their poetry, I really think this is the ...

Hiya! First off, your writing style is gorgeous. I love it. It's clean cut, descriptive in all the right places but never too much, and you have an interesting, subtle ...

Wow. This was really heavy. It has a powerful message, and you deliver it really really well. And I mean that. Your description was heart-wrenching at times. Sometimes there was ...

Hi! I'm basically going to repeat what has been said above: this is a really cool idea, and it could become like a regular. It's up to you where you ...

Hey! Like above, I'm just going to review your prologue for now, and if you would like my advice on the first chapter let me know. First of all, it's ...

Hey! Welcome to YWS! Have you been to the Welcome area to introduce yourself? If not, it's a really great place to meet some people and get some points (which ...

Hi there! First of all, welcome to YWS! You only joined this morning I notice, so I hope you're settling in OK. Everyone here is really lovely, and if you ...

Hi! So sorry it's taken me this long to get back to you... for an uneventful half term, I've had surprisingly little time lol. Anyway, to your story. WOW!! What ...

Hi! I'm going to start with this was interesting. You were very detailed, and that's good because I'm tired and can't be bothered to imagine. But I didn't have to, ...

Hi! I'm cottonrulz and I'm here to review. Well, duh. Anyway, this was a really sweet short piece - maybe a little too much so, as there was a lot ...

Hey! Sorry it's taken so long to get back to you. I thought this was another excellent follow-on piece, and you've kept the flow of added information going at just ...