Cotton

Hiya! Now I just want to make this point before I begin: for almost as long as I can remember doing poetry in school, I can remember loathing it. Poetry ...

I think you got the opening just right with the introduction of your main character because you put in a fabulously detailed description of his appearance, then a subtle one ...

Well, I don't think that there is anything more that I can say that has not already been said! The previous comments all look very helpful in respect of improving ...

First of all - bizarre! You posted this on my birthday! Right, now for your writing! It was really rather funny, and I did laugh out loud in several places. ...