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Oh, there have been several mentions to Julius' person even before he first showed up. First time was... after Hilda first fought a Valnr Drone, I believe. Though he hasn't ...

I confess that Eliza/Paula's relationship is complicated to get across before this point. Eliza has a whole lot of reasons why she just wants to keep things as basic and ...

Hmhmm, I see your point. It's another of those moments of me being unsure if what's written was enough or if it needed more. I'll go over it when I've ...

Or is it poor form to play with hindsight? :(

One thing I completely forgot is that I DID mention pirates as being a thing - Vanessa herself said her mother was one! Owen mentioned his dad hunted Zangari pirates, ...

No, no, thank you for the honest review. :) And, first off, Eliza didn't purposefully brainwash Paula! In fact, the next chapter will be focused on the commandant herself to ...

Sorry I didn't answer this before - either I didn't get the notice or I simply didn't see it. Yeah, I'll concede your point that I tend to worry that ...

The problem with recognizing Eliza as an Ascended Scion is that her brand's hidden behind the mask. So, if the guy hasn't been told to keep an eye out for ...

I try to keep the battles going by quickly but my default is still to overwrite things... I've talked about it with Megrim below but I have the long battles ...

Sorry, I expressed myself poorly. Either way, I've made some changes based on what you pointed out. I'll have this slated for more thorough editing later on. Cheers! :)

I really am listening; time and again, changes were made because of what was said. I only reply and ask more because I'm trying to get more information regarding whatever ...

Way back, I thought that Hilda might have issues with killing other people at first. But, as I went along and wrote the situation in the north as I did, ...

This is my first novel, yes, and I'm by no means considering publishing the thing. Just something I'm doing because I felt like it. Mind, I am keeping what everyone's ...

I do normally give my chapters one or two reads before posting them. Problem was, this one was posted right as I was coming down with dengue fever (took me ...

I confess that I felt forced to end the scene where I did simply due to the circumstances: Hilda can't catch up and make Paula talk since the girl can ...