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Hey Justy! “Kristy, would you please come up and see me” Miss Candy asked me. Miss Candy is one of the science teachers here at my school. There's a few ...

Al! Something by you! I don't think I've reviewed something by you in the longest time, or maybe never, and that's just awful so I'm going to review NOW! Anyway, ...

Hey Jigs! I shuffle my feet and grin, I don’t really want to but I will. You could place "go" in between "want to" and "but I will" for clarity ...

Kylan, thanks for the reminder. I can always count on you to make me not forget! :) -- The heat presses down on our city like an clothing iron and ...

Hey Hannah! This title certainly is an attention grabber. I would say though that perhaps it did not receive reviews because you posted so many items simultaneously. The best method ...

Hey Hannah! She wondered if he’d gotten it all planned out the way she had. When writing fiction, there are some low-class, icky words that should try to be avoided, ...

Angie, dear! On an evening as dark as soot and as chilled as death, two men were walking down the road. They were haggard, with clothes that looked to have ...

Connie muffin cake sweetie-- The darkness dreams in his prison. Since you're working on a personification, I think you should kick "the" and start with "Darkness dreams in his prison". ...

Hey Gahks! I'm not a very big poetry person, so I'm not promising an amazingly technical review, but I'll just say what I think and hopefully that will help! Upon ...

Hey Mars-- Did you have a name change recently? Did you used to be someone else...? *weird beginning of a review* o_O First, I'm not a really big fan of ...

Hey Ex-- First off, I really loved the title. It drew me in like hot cakes. I gave you a gold star merely because you had an inventive title that ...

Hey Haruno-- "Wake up, you urchin!" A rough voice with a heavy Northern accent grated Bane's eardrums as he stirred himself into consciousness. As a reader, just starting this story, ...

Hey Ducati. Sorry about chat-- I had an inkling Maria was one of the classy ones. Er, what is it that made him think this? The bad trip/drunkenness? I just ...

Hey Connie! Jigs and Jabs have said a lot here. I'm just going to give a brief review with my thoughts. A penny for my thoughts -- seriously, my thoughts ...

Hey Sunny-- That breakfast certainly was a maladroit affair, as he had predicted. That? I think "the breakfast" sounds better -- not quite sure why you say "that". What made ...