ChocoDanish

the tenses i'm trying my best to fix them. it be nice to know where they are but ok. the paragraph is a whole issue with me. this is as ...

right u only read this not my previous works

they is a term for intersex

thx XDD

streifen is well a tiger. when you see tigers u see them chilling n even when they prowl is like they have zero motivation. i dunno how to describe that. ...

could u review my work?

@Rosendorn sorry if I sound mean. Paragraphing is a personal issue of mine

@Rosendorn I care about if i describe the characters looks or not and yeah Ik what u mean about the body language thing. ll-_- maybe in the far off future ...

@Moalex yeah i don't have points to put each chapter on their own page yet

@Rosendorn did I describe alice's appearance at all? and sorry but I won't be adding more spaces but i will be trying the body language thing. Thank u for ur ...

funny chapter

interesting

alternate time for different dimension. like a day in ayda realm is a minute in madeline world?

i'm asian XD

ohhh than you capture that perfectly XD