Chirantha

Hi dj, Well, this is somewhat of a nice story, but to me it seems a bit clichéd. I mean, the storyline seems like a beaten path that most of ...

Hi Stela, Well, I'm intrigued. This story seems mysterious enough to catch my attention and I do hope you intend to continue it. Okay, let's dive into the review, Mistakes ...

Hi there Max, So, before I review this, wow, that's was a long story, and I did like the story although there are some points where I got confused, mostly ...

First of all, Welcome to YWS *Hands a butter cookie* :) Well, Spyrit, this is really good effort you've put into this story. It has a certain added-touch into it, ...

Hi there Hayley. Okay, I read the story, and I have to say, you took a really unusual route. I meant, how you put more focus into dialogue than description, ...

Before beginning my review, Welcome to YWS :D *Hands a milk cookie* Anyway, nice story. But before I go into specifics I should repeat the fact mentioned by 'Parigirle' The ...

Hmm.......interesting, the way this story is going. I beginning to like it even more. :) Mistakes However, now, we walked down the middle of the street The two words, 'However' ...

Hope you have a pleasant and joyful year as well, Caitlin. :D Ooooh, I knew you included the palm reading for a reason. So, you revealed a part of your ...

Hi Onyx, I have to say the same thing you've said. This was much more neater and the stazas were more connected. Mistakes You with the family, smiling, at your ...

Hey there Janine. Welcome to YWS! *Hands cookie* :D I have to ask you a question first. Is this a chapter of a story or is it just a short ...

Interesting prologue Cy. I kinda like the way it seems to be going. Mistakes In the short time that I’ve lived I have never, not even once, given a thought ...

For the first time ever, I saw a mistake-free story. Kudos to you for writing a really big chapter without any serious mistakes. I saw one or two minor ones ...

Hi Fire, Welcome to YWS! Random comment - Do you know how many users that have the word 'fire' in their user names in this site? :D Okay, this is ...

Ahh, good thing you decided to write this in past tense. My, my, my I never thought the second chapter would go this way. Nice idea. Mistakes I ran down ...

The whole point that captured me in this story was that its written according to a dream you had. When you think about it, most of the ideas that writers ...