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Re: Just Listen Ch. 2
Your story seems very interesting so far :) Just a few nitpicky things though: And so here I am, sitting at my desk the next day Like canislupus said, the ...
Aug 13, 2010 -
Re: The McBride's:Generation's Whisper Chapter 2
I really like your story so far :) A few minor things though: She gathered her things and made her way toward s the door. The bell to the last ...
Aug 13, 2010 -
Re: Fixed At Zero [Chapter Three - Draft]
I think that this story really engages the reader because it's so honest. :) I know that I can personally relate to how Chloe to some degree. Just one thing: ...
Aug 12, 2010 -
Re: Fixed At Zero [Chapter 1 - Draft]
I think that this chapter is very intriguing, and makes the reader want to know more :) A few things though: “No, you’d have to exercise longer than that, Chloe. ...
Aug 12, 2010
