Charlii101

I absolutely L-O-V-E i adore how young Lily sounds and how sweet and innocent she is! just keep writing!!!!

This captures such emotion i absolutely love this it makes me wonder about all the things that you've portrayed and how it holds such imagination. keep it up!

i'm loving the flow of this poem it is simple yet speaks 1000 words and it's god good emotion going through the lines and words. i really like this you ...

oooo harsh poetry, i like the dearyness and the doomed ending also the darkness to this it gives the reader somethign to grasp onto to read more! keep going!

Love the atmosphere created in the story! you used good devices and kept the reader wanting to read on, just add to the characters surroundings like where she is describe ...

thanks for the comments guys, sorry it was hard to get, i will take your advice and try and edit it so it's suitable, thaks alot i haven't taken any ...