CastlesInTheSky

Hi Holly! So ha, I got here, I did. :P Oooh, this was such a sweet poem and I really enjoyed reading. It reminded me a lot of Wordsworth's 'I ...

Here as requested, Adna darling! xD How do you learn unknowable knowledge? I think you should elaborate and expand on this idea. It's like we've got this really original, perceptive ...

Hey there Ralph! :D Here as requested. Oh, feel honoured, because this is my 200th review. xDDD Henri Fredric Amiel once said, "Heroism is the brilliant triumph of the soul ...

Hello, dear! Sarah again. With a back-pack full of paper, she sat down, and emptied the contents onto her desk. Backpack has no hyphon. The first bell of the morning ...

Hello, dear. :) Sarah here. I. INTRO This was really cute and I loved your title: it's really what made me start to read because it's catchy, refreshing and original. ...

Hi Lord Anzius! :D Here as requested. On with the critique. Why? I asked myself. 'Why' should be italicised. Well I recon it looks a bit hostile, but that is ...

Hi Anna! :) I wasn't going to critique this until the Imagine Contest was over, as you can probably work out it wouldn't be fair for me to critique something ...

Hey Twooster! :D Here as requested. I know, this is unforgivably late. Sorry about that, I've been so weighed down with schoolwork. [/bad excuses] It caught at the thatched and ...

Hi Demeter darling! Sarah here! :D Sorry this is late, I've really been slacking with reviews recently. Who could ever think now that behind those delicate features, there's a little ...

Hi, Kirsten! :D Here as requested. I don't think I should do a line by line as there aren't really any grammar/spelling mistakes or phrasing issues. I must say, I ...

Hi there Kirsten! a most strange spectacle; to behold the stars, glimmering. I do agree that 'glimmering' doesn't quite fit in with the atmosphere you're trying to create [which is ...

I agree with Kirsten [above]. This poem has some lovely moments but you need to make it more tangible. You can do this by using concrete imagery and vivid descriptions. ...

Hi Stella! Sarah here. The murderer leaves the room, the door swings close softly, and their victim gasps, gulping their last, precious breaths. I think 'closed' should have a 'd' ...

Gah! :P It seems I shall have to even things up, Kirsten. Yes, I love Charlotte, and I take full credit for driving her to this. You shall not convert ...

Hi Stella! Sarah here. She sits with him now, on an ebony throne to match his, as people appeal to him. I think the second part of this sentence would ...