Cassie9960

The rymeing doesn't flow very well. If you had wanted to ryme it should have gone onto the end. For example: The little black cat wore a fuzzy green hat, ...

I liked the story, I just think you need a few minor corrections that the others already got to. But other then that it was wonderful!!!! Just try to be ...

You need to add way more to your story. It was way to short. I liked what you wrote about though. I also liked how you showed the hatred between ...

I thought it was a very good story but you defiantly need to describe you characters more. Some thoughts I had during this sory is, What does Beth look like? ...

I have read all three of your chapters and have enjoyed all of them, i hope that you will be writing more soon. I think you have a great career ...